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Wednesday 20 September 2017

Going to star dome

WALT recount a personal experience


Planning my recount


Orientation (Introduction)
Who?
John
What?
ONE TREE HILL
When?
Last Thursday
Where?
stardome
What happened?

Tell it in the order it happened.
First of all
We went on the bus we just waited then we Arrived to stardome miss Buchanan went to check in for the class to go into stardome.  
Next
We walked into stardome we looked a round the stuff we saw lego stuff that was a car that you need to go in space so you don’t need to walk
After that
We came in the room that has a gold and blue telescope it was big and we watched the moon go around earth is a small plant.     
Later on
We went into the dome it was big and colourful it had the rainbow colours then we lied back on nice chairs look up at the dome it like a semicircle but it’s bigger  
In the end
We went on the bus we came back to school and we had lunch.
Reorientation (Summary)


Now that you have made a plan, it is time to write your recount in full sentences: First of all
We went on the bus we just waited then we Arrived to stardome miss Buchanan went to check in for the class to go into stardome.  


Next
We walked into stardome we looked a round the display models we saw a lego spaceship that was a car that you need to go in space so you don’t need to walk .


After that
We came in the room that has a gold and blue telescope it was big and we watched the moon go around earth is a small plant.     


Later on
We went into the dome it was big and colourful it had the rainbow colours then we lied back on nice chairs look up at the dome it like a semicircle but it’s bigger.


In the end

We went on the bus we came back to school and we had lunch.

1 comment:

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